Tutor feedback on assignment 5 can be found here. Based on the comments received I undertook a limited review of this assignment.
- My tutor suggested that I had a re-think about my strategy for captioning the images. I decided to stick to my original idea of providing the number of multiple exposures combined with a single word to describe each image, but changed some of the words used to reinforce my original idea of ambiguity:
- The caption for the 10 exposures picture was changed from “Window” to “Opening”. The original word alluded to the opening in the corridor wall through which I took the pictures, but looking at the resulting image, I can see multiple windows from the side of St Giles Cripplegate. Since I did not want the caption to be confused with this, I decided to change it to “Opening”, which is also a more accurate descriptor of the structural feature through which I took the images.
- The caption for the 2 exposures picture was changed from “Enclave” to “Oasis”. My tutor suggested in his comments that the shapes created by the inverted exposures used in this picture alluded to an enclave. I did not want the caption to make direct references to what was visible in the frame and consequently (and for the same reason as before) I decided to change the word to Oasis, which is still attuned to my original commentary on this image.
- I revised the cropping of some of the images to improve composition or exclude certain extraneous elements that were too distracting. I also adjusted the lighting and contrast in some of the images to improve how they look when printing.
The original and reworked set of images are shown below. For the original notes accompanying each picture, please follow this link.
|Original Submission||Revised Submission||Final Caption (notes)|
(cropped to reduce negative space on the right)
(cropped to reduce highlight on bottom)
As in the original submission, I envisage the pictures to be presented in decreasing order of exposure, in a booklet with the back cover swapped with the front. The idea is to give an indication of what is my preferred order for the images (ie to be seen from back to front) without being overtly prescriptive about this. The revised booklet can be found here